安家楼F11000被拒不知道为什么

就直接说面签吧，17号外国女VO我前面那个墨迹挺长时间，

寒暄.....略
V：高中哪年毕业
M：2010
V：就申请这一个学校？
M：yes，just one
V：为神马选择这个学校？
M：my teacher told me the university is fit me. And the school has beautiful evirment , the city xx where the university locates is very beautiful it is a popular area for outdoor activities it is a public and conditional addition school the major xx is very outstanding. So. .....
V：出过国么？
M：no i havent
V：工作过么
M：实习助理3个月。
打字......
sorry....

准备再试一次，跪求大神指教，哪里需要雕琢，以上杯具的原因是什么那些要避免？我自己有点盲目