托福编辑修改经验

我每周练习两篇，本来是有Native speaker朋友帮我看，但他最近工作太忙，不好意思叨扰，
在这边求批求不到，才上百度找免费批改...
找到一个特别提供托福修改的网站，收费的{:7_190:} 还好不贵(340字, 85元)

整体感觉不错，才上来分享~

这是编辑给我的总反馈，包含模拟评分和四个面向的反馈，看到Very good心情就是好!

[align="left"]Score: 4/5 [/align][align="left"]Organization: Very good! You had a clear introduction, body, and conclusion; however, you should try to outline your reasons in the introduction and summarize them in the conclusion.[/align][align="left"]Content: Excellent reasons and examples - well done! [/align][align="left"]Vocabulary: Good, but some awkward choices, as noted.[/align][align="left"]Grammar: Beware of errors in article usage.[/align][align="left"]
[/align][align="left"]其中我感觉最受用的是指出了许多awkward word choice, 例: [/align][align="left"]Also, it is difficult for students to receive these resources on their own. -> Furthermore, it is difficult for students to access these resources on their own.[/align][align="left"]First, the most important goal that student go to universities is education. -> First, the main reason students go to universities is to get an education.[/align][align="left"]另外句子开头时常重复，所以编辑改了句子也给了comments(While "but," "also," and "and" may be used to start sentences in informal writing, a replacement should be used for a more formal tone .)[/align]
[align="left"]改出来的样子像下方，这不是我写的，我的不公布哒{:7_186:}[/align]


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