文书tips：如何写个人陈述第一段（给深深纠结于怎样开头的大家
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刚刚看到一篇博文，叫“如何开始个人陈述：杀手opening”，感觉很实用，
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Firstly, don't begin with the overkill opening
One of the dangers of trying to come up with a great opening sentence is that you can end up overthinking it and going overboard. As one admissions tutor said: 'Be succinct and draw the reader in, but not with a gimmick. This isn't the X Factor.'
Even some Oxbridge admissions tutors mentioned this. They emphasised the need for candidates to engage the reader with your (relevant) perceptions or ideas, not by something flashy.
Beginning your personal statement – tips from the experts
We spoke to a number of admissions tutors to get their number one tip for starting a personal statement. This is what they said:
'Don't waste time trying to think of a catchy opening; it's often a complete turn-off.'
'Your interest in the course is the biggest thing. Start with why you chose it.'
'The best personal statements get to the point quickly.'
'Start with a short sentence that captures the reason why you are interested in studying the area you are applying for and that communicates your enthusiasm for it.'
'Go straight in. Why are you excited about studying this course?'
'The opening is your chance to introduce yourself, to explain your motivation for studying the course and to demonstrate your understanding of it.'
'It's your enthusiasm for the course we want to know about. Start with that.'
'Write what comes naturally.'
'What you want to study and why should be in the first two sentences. What excites you about the course and why do you want to learn about it more?'
'Be specific from line one.'
'Talk about you and your enthusiasm for the subject from the very start.'
'In your opening paragraph you need to show that you know what you are applying for. Don't waffle or say you want to study something just because it's interesting. Explain what you find interesting about it.'
'It's much better to engage us with something interesting, relevant, specific and current in your opening line, not 'from a young age' or 'I have always wanted to'. Start with what's inspiring you now, not what inspired you when you were six.'
Maybe don't begin at the start?
Some tutors even suggested you shouldn't even begin at the start...:
'I think the opening line is the hardest one to write, so I often say leave it until last and just try and get something down on paper.'
'Don't spend too long on the introduction. Concentrate on the main content of your statement and write the introduction last.'
'I often advise applicants to start with paragraph two, where you get into why you want to study the course. That's what we're really interested in.'
The best statements tend to be genuine and specific from the very start. So you'll be on the right track if you explain your enthusiasm for the subject or course, your understanding of it and what you want to achieve from it.
Five cliche statement beginnings to avoid
However, try to avoid the most obvious opening sentences in your personal statement, so you stand out from the first line.
To help, every year Ucas publishes a list of the most common opening lines in personal statements and urges applicants to avoid using these 'hackneyed' phrases. Previous years' top five included:
'From a young age…'
'For as long as I can remember…
'I am applying for this course because…'
'I have always been interested in…'
'Throughout my life I have always enjoyed…'
At number 11 was a Nelson Mandela quote, which brings us on to our next section...
Connect the beginning of your statement to the end
A final thought. One technique that can be effective is the 'necklace approach'. This is when you make a link between your opening sentence and closing paragraph, reinforcing and adding an extra dimension at the end to what you said at the start.
For example, if you started with an interesting line about what is currently motivating to study your chosen degree course, you could link back to it in your closing paragraph, perhaps with something about why you would love to study this further at uni.
更详细的可以看原网址，最近写好了文书的框架，但是不知道怎样写一个catchy的开头，并且不知道怎样给申请不同专业写一个合适的开头，这篇文章帮助还是挺大的～～～
欢迎加米
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Firstly, don't begin with the overkill opening
One of the dangers of trying to come up with a great opening sentence is that you can end up overthinking it and going overboard. As one admissions tutor said: 'Be succinct and draw the reader in, but not with a gimmick. This isn't the X Factor.'
Even some Oxbridge admissions tutors mentioned this. They emphasised the need for candidates to engage the reader with your (relevant) perceptions or ideas, not by something flashy.
Beginning your personal statement – tips from the experts
We spoke to a number of admissions tutors to get their number one tip for starting a personal statement. This is what they said:
'Don't waste time trying to think of a catchy opening; it's often a complete turn-off.'
'Your interest in the course is the biggest thing. Start with why you chose it.'
'The best personal statements get to the point quickly.'
'Start with a short sentence that captures the reason why you are interested in studying the area you are applying for and that communicates your enthusiasm for it.'
'Go straight in. Why are you excited about studying this course?'
'The opening is your chance to introduce yourself, to explain your motivation for studying the course and to demonstrate your understanding of it.'
'It's your enthusiasm for the course we want to know about. Start with that.'
'Write what comes naturally.'
'What you want to study and why should be in the first two sentences. What excites you about the course and why do you want to learn about it more?'
'Be specific from line one.'
'Talk about you and your enthusiasm for the subject from the very start.'
'In your opening paragraph you need to show that you know what you are applying for. Don't waffle or say you want to study something just because it's interesting. Explain what you find interesting about it.'
'It's much better to engage us with something interesting, relevant, specific and current in your opening line, not 'from a young age' or 'I have always wanted to'. Start with what's inspiring you now, not what inspired you when you were six.'
Maybe don't begin at the start?
Some tutors even suggested you shouldn't even begin at the start...:
'I think the opening line is the hardest one to write, so I often say leave it until last and just try and get something down on paper.'
'Don't spend too long on the introduction. Concentrate on the main content of your statement and write the introduction last.'
'I often advise applicants to start with paragraph two, where you get into why you want to study the course. That's what we're really interested in.'
The best statements tend to be genuine and specific from the very start. So you'll be on the right track if you explain your enthusiasm for the subject or course, your understanding of it and what you want to achieve from it.
Five cliche statement beginnings to avoid
However, try to avoid the most obvious opening sentences in your personal statement, so you stand out from the first line.
To help, every year Ucas publishes a list of the most common opening lines in personal statements and urges applicants to avoid using these 'hackneyed' phrases. Previous years' top five included:
'From a young age…'
'For as long as I can remember…
'I am applying for this course because…'
'I have always been interested in…'
'Throughout my life I have always enjoyed…'
At number 11 was a Nelson Mandela quote, which brings us on to our next section...
Connect the beginning of your statement to the end
A final thought. One technique that can be effective is the 'necklace approach'. This is when you make a link between your opening sentence and closing paragraph, reinforcing and adding an extra dimension at the end to what you said at the start.
For example, if you started with an interesting line about what is currently motivating to study your chosen degree course, you could link back to it in your closing paragraph, perhaps with something about why you would love to study this further at uni.
更详细的可以看原网址，最近写好了文书的框架，但是不知道怎样写一个catchy的开头，并且不知道怎样给申请不同专业写一个合适的开头，这篇文章帮助还是挺大的～～～
欢迎加米
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