托福写作一直22左右,感觉是有明显问题但是自己感觉不到,求指教

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In the growth of every student, making schedules is required to make sure that all of them will follow the instructions of teachers and acquire the knowledge smoothly. I still remember that in the morning we will have some classes on math and English while in the afternoon we will play basketball on the playground. Recently, some people argue that teens are required to make plans and to organize due to the complexity of modern society. As far as I am concerned, the ability is useful and critical for the following reasons.

First of all, young people will get rid of the pressure by making plans. With the swift development of the whole society, people need to confront various problems and situations which are hard to imagine hundreds of years ago. If a young person makes a decision and finishes works without a plan, he will definitely commit some mistakes and miss the deadline of some vital missions for he does not have plenty of experience to take actions thoughtfully. In contrast, if he makes a plan before being overwhelmed in his tasks, what he really needs to do is concentrating on the current work without being worried about the next step or missing other things. Since he does not have these worries, he is in a good mood without pressure.

Secondly, young people will make progress by making plans. People who have a plan in detail will pay more attention to their works on hand. It means that they will spare no effort for their tasks. It is universally acceptable that people work more efficiently without disturbance. For example, if young people with a plan are preparing for an exam, they will get a high score. While if young people with a plan are doing researches, they will acquire improvements and results faster.

Last but not least, young people are more reliable and trustworthy by making a plan. It cannot be denied that people who have a plan will complete a variety of tasks smoothly because they have considered the possible problems and troubles when they making the plans. They will predict the situation they will meet with and the methods to tackle them. As a result, they are not likely to commit mistakes. So co-workers or friends will trust them and take them as a reliable person. These relationships are essential for young people to be successful and outstanding.

In a nutshell, young people who are able to plan and organize are essential not only for themselves but also for the people around them in that modern society is so complicated.
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