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题目：15. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults,children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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40分钟写完的。
思路：
1.没理财会有坏处，乱花钱
2.学会理财对未来好
3.学会理财带来成就感和信心，帮助孩子在其他方面也成功
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Nowadays children always have a lot of money given byparents or owned by themselves. With lots of money in the pockets, it's moreand more important for children to learn how to manage their own money. If theycan learn it early, they can be likely to become financially responsible adultsin the future.
Children are so young that they can not control themselveswell. If they have lots of money to use without learn how to manage, they maydo something wrong. I have a friend named Steve when I was in middle school.Steve lived in a rich family and his parents gave him a lot of money to use. Buthe did not know how to use the money properly and one time he spent all themoney to bet and then lost all his money! It shocked his parents because as itwas really a large number of money. If Steve's parents can teach him how tomanage money, he may not do such wrong thing.
Learning how to use money can also contribute to the futureof the children. Children who learn to manage their money early can also knowto how to use their money properly when they grow up. For instance, a boy whoown his money and spend it carefully in order to buy his favorite bike willalso know how to make money to buy a house when he has a family. What's more,children learn things more quickly than adults and it's also hard for them toforget what they lean at the young age. Thus children can learn how to managemoney quickly, which will benefit their future life.
Also children can get a feeling of achievement from successin managing their money, which helps children gain confidence and bring a lothelp for other things. Let's say there is a girl who do bad in math and she isalways self-abased. Then her father gives her a lot of money and tells her thatshe will not give her anymore until 3 months later. So the girl has to learn touse this money to survive for the next three month. She finally make it and herparents all feel proud for her, even though it's just a little thing. However,this thing helps the girl to be more confident and then she improves her mathsuccessfully. Learning managing one's money is not so hard for children, but itcan bring confidence for them.
If we can learn how to manage when we are young, we are less likely to do wrongs things. Instead, we can benefit a lot from it and help usgain confidence to win and success.
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题目：15. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults,children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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40分钟写完的。
思路：
1.没理财会有坏处，乱花钱
2.学会理财对未来好
3.学会理财带来成就感和信心，帮助孩子在其他方面也成功
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Nowadays children always have a lot of money given byparents or owned by themselves. With lots of money in the pockets, it's moreand more important for children to learn how to manage their own money. If theycan learn it early, they can be likely to become financially responsible adultsin the future.
Children are so young that they can not control themselveswell. If they have lots of money to use without learn how to manage, they maydo something wrong. I have a friend named Steve when I was in middle school.Steve lived in a rich family and his parents gave him a lot of money to use. Buthe did not know how to use the money properly and one time he spent all themoney to bet and then lost all his money! It shocked his parents because as itwas really a large number of money. If Steve's parents can teach him how tomanage money, he may not do such wrong thing.
Learning how to use money can also contribute to the futureof the children. Children who learn to manage their money early can also knowto how to use their money properly when they grow up. For instance, a boy whoown his money and spend it carefully in order to buy his favorite bike willalso know how to make money to buy a house when he has a family. What's more,children learn things more quickly than adults and it's also hard for them toforget what they lean at the young age. Thus children can learn how to managemoney quickly, which will benefit their future life.
Also children can get a feeling of achievement from successin managing their money, which helps children gain confidence and bring a lothelp for other things. Let's say there is a girl who do bad in math and she isalways self-abased. Then her father gives her a lot of money and tells her thatshe will not give her anymore until 3 months later. So the girl has to learn touse this money to survive for the next three month. She finally make it and herparents all feel proud for her, even though it's just a little thing. However,this thing helps the girl to be more confident and then she improves her mathsuccessfully. Learning managing one's money is not so hard for children, but itcan bring confidence for them.
If we can learn how to manage when we are young, we are less likely to do wrongs things. Instead, we can benefit a lot from it and help usgain confidence to win and success.
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