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题目：A or DA all high school students should take a basic economics course?
立论：
1. 这样有利于学生全面发展、更有成就感
2. 这样可以帮助学生更好理财、投资
3. 这样做推进社会进步，学校名声也得以提升
修改侧重点：词汇运用，有问题就批
正文：
Undeniably,economy is a crucial factor for the development of society. I wholeheartedlyhold the standpoint that all high school students should take a basic economicscourse. As far as I am concerned, economics lessons bring benefits to studentsboth extrinsically and intrinsically. Besides, they facilitate the progress ofthe whole society, and to some degree, bring high schools with more reputationon account of more outstanding students they cultivated.
Sincecomprehensive qualities of individuals are becoming more and more significantfor evaluating one's ability, isn't it necessary for all high school studentsto take a basic economics course? The concept of economy is necessary forstudents' all-round development. No one would believe that an individualwithout a fundamental understanding of economy could succeed in business. Comprehensivepersonalities undoubtedly pave the way for one's prospective development. Inaddition, mastering one more practical skill builds up one's sense of achievement.For instance, economic minds help one take account of problems more providentlywhen working in groups and this leads to more approvals from co-workers whichincrease his or her self-efficacy.
Equally importantto students' all-round growth mentioned above is that basic economical lessonsoffer students practical financial skills and instructions on futureinvestment. For example, wealthy though massive people are, they are unaware ofthe significance of acquiring economic and financial concepts. If they obtain theseskills, they would gain even more fortune. There are myriads of cases that onewho owns huge fortune at the beginning fails to keep the wealth due to the lackof minds of economy and financing. What’s more, one can take a step further ininvestment with the intelligence of economics and finance, and roll his or herwealth with multiple times.
Besides, the more economicalperceptions acquired by students, the more benefits gained by society and highschools. As discussed above, an all-round developed student is more likely togain wealth and success. Since the number of wealthy or successful alumni is anon-ignorable criterion for the judgment of a distinguished school, highschools themselves definitely should offer rudimental courses of economy tostudents. With more excellent alumni, reputation of high schools raises up naturally.Most of all, more elites being cultivated means more impetus for the advance ofsociety. And all these merits come into being due to a more comprehensiveeducation, of course, including the basic education of economy.
In light of allthe above, it is obvious that basic course in terms of economics should beoffered to students. On one hand, it is helpful for students’ all-rounddevelopment. On the other hand, it promotes the advance of society andreputation of high schools.
立论：
1. 这样有利于学生全面发展、更有成就感
2. 这样可以帮助学生更好理财、投资
3. 这样做推进社会进步，学校名声也得以提升
修改侧重点：词汇运用，有问题就批
正文：
Undeniably,economy is a crucial factor for the development of society. I wholeheartedlyhold the standpoint that all high school students should take a basic economicscourse. As far as I am concerned, economics lessons bring benefits to studentsboth extrinsically and intrinsically. Besides, they facilitate the progress ofthe whole society, and to some degree, bring high schools with more reputationon account of more outstanding students they cultivated.
Sincecomprehensive qualities of individuals are becoming more and more significantfor evaluating one's ability, isn't it necessary for all high school studentsto take a basic economics course? The concept of economy is necessary forstudents' all-round development. No one would believe that an individualwithout a fundamental understanding of economy could succeed in business. Comprehensivepersonalities undoubtedly pave the way for one's prospective development. Inaddition, mastering one more practical skill builds up one's sense of achievement.For instance, economic minds help one take account of problems more providentlywhen working in groups and this leads to more approvals from co-workers whichincrease his or her self-efficacy.
Equally importantto students' all-round growth mentioned above is that basic economical lessonsoffer students practical financial skills and instructions on futureinvestment. For example, wealthy though massive people are, they are unaware ofthe significance of acquiring economic and financial concepts. If they obtain theseskills, they would gain even more fortune. There are myriads of cases that onewho owns huge fortune at the beginning fails to keep the wealth due to the lackof minds of economy and financing. What’s more, one can take a step further ininvestment with the intelligence of economics and finance, and roll his or herwealth with multiple times.
Besides, the more economicalperceptions acquired by students, the more benefits gained by society and highschools. As discussed above, an all-round developed student is more likely togain wealth and success. Since the number of wealthy or successful alumni is anon-ignorable criterion for the judgment of a distinguished school, highschools themselves definitely should offer rudimental courses of economy tostudents. With more excellent alumni, reputation of high schools raises up naturally.Most of all, more elites being cultivated means more impetus for the advance ofsociety. And all these merits come into being due to a more comprehensiveeducation, of course, including the basic education of economy.
In light of allthe above, it is obvious that basic course in terms of economics should beoffered to students. On one hand, it is helpful for students’ all-rounddevelopment. On the other hand, it promotes the advance of society andreputation of high schools.
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